Improper Usage
“I would like to point out some weaknesses in your speech”
“I would like to point out some negatives in your speech”
Right Usages
“I would like to suggest some areas of improvements for you”
“I have some recommendations for you”
“I have some suggestions for you”
(Also read: CRISP Speech Evaluations)
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Improper Usage
“You did not use the stage properly”
Right Usages
“I wish you had used the stage space better”
"You were mostly standing in one position, when delivering the speech. Your speech had 3 distinct chronological ordered stories. You could've divided the stage into 3 sections and used one section for each story".
(Also read: Methods to organize your speech evaluations)
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Improper Usage
“Your speech was not up to the mark”
Right Usages
“I feel that you can do more improvements to meet the project objectives”
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Improper Usage
For an Ice breaker speech,
“You didn’t use the stage space well (or) I think you should’ve had more vocal variety”
Right Usages
For an Ice Breaker speech,
I learned more about you
You didn’t use notes – though you were allowed to use notes. Great job.
You were keeping your hands in the pocket, which is a sign of nervousness. You can feel comfortable to let your hands down when they are not in use.
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Improper Usage
“I have so much feedback to share, I think I’m going to run out of time. But, it is fine. I want you to learn as much as possible from this feedback” I’m going to share with you the top 2 areas where you can focus to improve
“You should’ve improved your vocal variety”
Right Usages
“You said … I saw a huge elephant and a tiny little rat. Instead, you could’ve said … I saw a HUGE elephant and a TINY LITTLE rat”
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Improper Usage
“You need to improve your eye contact”
Right Usages
“I felt that you can improve on your eye contact. Divide the audience into 4 groups; establish eye contact with at least 1 person in each group. You’ll give a perception to everyone in the group that you are looking at them. Then shift your attention to another group. Do it repeatedly until you cover all the 4 groups”
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Improper Usage
“It was evident to everyone that you didn’t rehearse your speech”
Right Usage
“I would recommend you to practice in front of mirror a few times to gain more confidence. More rehearsals will give you more confidence”
(Also read: 50 words to use instead of "good" in your speeches)
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Improper Usage
Yours was a boring speech (or)
You put all the audience to sleep.
Right Usage
I felt that if you had some stories to convey your message, the speech would've been much more interesting.
(Also read: CRISP Speech Evaluations)
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